Excellent! The demon got no more than he deserved. Your story brought to my mind some of the supernatural tales of Isaac Bashevis Singer, and now I’m off to rifle my library for a book I haven’t read in many years. And I must listen to your reading. What a treat!
Even better on another reading. Also your reading was very well done! The chipper voice of the demon really makes it creepier. Like I can see his eyes gleaming with his each word, like yes “I’m so smart and hideous.” Makes it all the better.
i love alliteration! and there was such a gleefully wicked tone to the story, very fairy tale, inventive word play gave a sparkle. i didn't hear you read it live.... got to catch up! Andy's performance was jarringly effective wasnt it! omg. i heard it in my car as i drove home and keiths but i missed you sadly!!
SO good! What a great story, Garen.
Thank you, Lyndsey!!
Excellent! The demon got no more than he deserved. Your story brought to my mind some of the supernatural tales of Isaac Bashevis Singer, and now I’m off to rifle my library for a book I haven’t read in many years. And I must listen to your reading. What a treat!
Thank you so much, Liz! I admit I haven’t heard of that author. I’ll be looking him up! Hope you enjoy the reading!
Macabre. Macabre and gothic - in a fun Tim Burton sort of way. (That means I liked it)
Oh - and this is what should happen to all child abusers.
I’m glad you liked it! Beaming over here at the Tim Burton comparison. And yes, getting devoured by their own teeth is the least they deserve.
32 lines — nice attention to detail!
(don’t tell anyone, but I might have needed to Google how many teeth an adult human has)😬
this feels like a grimms brothers type of folktale. love how gruesome it is!
Thank you for the great compliment! 🖤 Bros Grimm!
Even better on another reading. Also your reading was very well done! The chipper voice of the demon really makes it creepier. Like I can see his eyes gleaming with his each word, like yes “I’m so smart and hideous.” Makes it all the better.
I appreciate that! I wanted him to be sorta pretentious and sleazy.😝 Thanks again for reading it through and giving me your thoughts!
I appreciate that! I wanted him to be sorta pretentious and sleazy.😝 Thanks again for reading it through!!
Also
"black blood GUSHED FROM HIS GUMS"
YES excellent! haha 😉😄
So much better than “ran out from.” Thanks for getting me to dig a little deeper!
i love alliteration! and there was such a gleefully wicked tone to the story, very fairy tale, inventive word play gave a sparkle. i didn't hear you read it live.... got to catch up! Andy's performance was jarringly effective wasnt it! omg. i heard it in my car as i drove home and keiths but i missed you sadly!!
Yes! I love how Erica said Andy’s was like performance art. Totally got that. And Keith’s was so haunting and beautiful. He has a great reading voice.
Love this story. Loved hearing you read it aloud and then reading it again. You know how to write darkness well!
Thank you, so much Carrie!! 🖤
I love the idea behind this story!...well-done especially in 1500 words! 😃
Thank you, Nick!!